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|nominated=06:54, March 7, 2023 | |nominated=06:54, March 7, 2023 | ||
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#{{User|Shadic 34}} This article has now become very thorough and detailed, with good writing too, I'll support! | #{{User|Shadic 34}} This article has now become very thorough and detailed, with good writing too, I'll support! | ||
#{{User|Mustard Machine}} Per all | #{{User|Mustard Machine}} Per all | ||
#{{User|Marino13}} I vote in support of the nomination | |||
#{{User|Koopa con Carne}} Issues taken care of. Go for it. | |||
#{{User|Killer Moth}} Per all. The article looks good. | |||
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I'm quite iffy on some aspects of | The article is handsome at a glance, but I'm quite iffy on some aspects of its writing. I'm not sure if this owes to the WarioWare series' random and absurd nature, but I find several passages disconnected, unclear, and, as a result, difficult to follow. For instance: | ||
<blockquote>[[Dr. Crygor#WarioWare: Get It Together!]]<br>In his story, Dr. Crygor is testing a new invention in a top secret factory: Flatterbots. The robots successfully applaud Doris 1's cleaning and Mike's singing, but do not react to Dr. Crygor's dancing. Deeming the test a failure, Dr. Crygor recalls the Flatterbots. After his stage is cleared, Dr. Crygor joins the gang, reassuring his status as a genius.</blockquote> | <blockquote>[[Dr. Crygor#WarioWare: Get It Together!]]<br>In his story, Dr. Crygor is testing a new invention in a top secret factory: Flatterbots. The robots successfully applaud Doris 1's cleaning and Mike's singing, but do not react to Dr. Crygor's dancing. Deeming the test a failure, Dr. Crygor recalls the Flatterbots. After his stage is cleared, Dr. Crygor joins the gang, reassuring his status as a genius.</blockquote> | ||
All good until the last sentence. Which "gang" is he joining? Is it the WarioWare Inc. employee team? Are there any circumstances directly related to the story so told in which he joins said gang? | All good until the last sentence. Which "gang" is he joining? Is it the WarioWare Inc. employee team? Are there any circumstances directly related to the story so told in which he joins said gang? | ||
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<blockquote>[[Dr. Crygor#WarioWare: Twisted!]]<br>Suddenly, the Gravitator dispenses a giant robot. Dr. Crygor jumps into the robot and flies off in it. However, while flying, Shuriken the Falcon rams into the robot. This causes it to fall apart, revealing him riding on a four-wheeled duck.</blockquote> | <blockquote>[[Dr. Crygor#WarioWare: Twisted!]]<br>Suddenly, the Gravitator dispenses a giant robot. Dr. Crygor jumps into the robot and flies off in it. However, while flying, Shuriken the Falcon rams into the robot. This causes it to fall apart, revealing him riding on a four-wheeled duck.</blockquote> | ||
I don't have much knowledge on the ''WarioWare'' series, so I unfortunately can't directly contribute to this article as much as I would like. I trust that I have made my points clear enough to serve as a crutch in resolving these issues and hopefully maximising the article's clear potential for FA status. {{User:Koopa con Carne/Sig}} 17:39, March 23, 2023 (EDT) | I don't have much knowledge on the ''WarioWare'' series, so I unfortunately can't directly contribute to this article as much as I would like. However, I trust that I have made my points clear enough to serve as a crutch in resolving these issues and hopefully maximising the article's clear potential for FA status. {{User:Koopa con Carne/Sig}} 17:39, March 23, 2023 (EDT) | ||
:Acknowledged the above comments. RHG1951 and I did some proofreading and re writing. {{user|PnnyCrygr}} | |||
I think the inventions section can use a gallery rather than a list of items. Sorry, I don't have much time to deeply go through the article but this is something I've noticed at first glancing through. {{User:Ray Trace/sig}} 22:56, March 26, 2023 (EDT) | |||
:Acknowledged, thanks for reminding. {{user|PnnyCrygr}} | |||
This article could use some last-minute minor improvements in every single section (see Contents menu before the "Background" section of the article) before it gets to be an FA tomorrow. {{user|PnnyCrygr}} | |||